Ocean cold, breathing
Far beyond feeling
Alive.
Metal lungs stinging
With your heart ringing
Contrive.
You have no reaping.
Why your soft weeping?
It comes with seeking;
Hot and cold swinging.
Arrive.
This is yours, weakling
Into the sweeping
You drive.
Out with the fleeting
Ocean cold, breathing.
Brothers succeeding
Others, retreating.
Survive.
Knowing the leaving
Leaves others pleading
To live.
You don't live. Meaning
Far beyond feeling.
Past is receding;
Begin your dreaming
And strive.
Show us your bleeding;
Perhaps you're leading.
Revive,
Far beyond feeling.
Ocean cold, breathing.
postscript
DFC day 18. Getting closer. I've nothing to say about this. The lai is already restrictive, without adding repetition. I can't imagine many writers of the lai nouveau get away with being easy to understand. kiwi-damnation.deviantart.com/…